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Compare the two responses to the same prompt.
Nowadays, working from home is becoming more and more popular1 in many countries. Some people think it has many advantages, but others think it also has disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages are more than the disadvantages2.
Firstly, working from home can save a lot of time.3 People do not need to spend time on the bus or train every day. Secondly, it can save money, because workers do not need to pay for transport and lunch outside. In addition, people can take care of their family more easily, for example their children or old parents.
However, there are also some disadvantages.4 Working from home makes people feel lonely because they cannot talk with their colleagues face to face. Moreover, some people cannot concentrate at home because there are many distractions, such as television and housework. It is also difficult for the company to manage the workers.
In conclusion, although working from home has some disadvantages, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Companies should allow their employees to work from home if it is possible.
Memorized filler phrasing. It fills space but shows no lexical range — a Band 6 marker when it opens the essay.
The position is stated, which protects Task Response — but "are more than" is an awkward calque. The natural phrasing is "outweigh", used correctly only in the conclusion.
Ideas are listed, not developed. Each advantage gets one sentence and no consequence: saved time — and then what? Band 7 requires extending an idea, not collecting more of them.
The disadvantages paragraph simply lists problems and never returns to the writer's position. The essay claims advantages win but never argues why these problems matter less.
The shift toward home working is one of the most significant changes in modern employment, and it is often debated whether its benefits justify its costs. In my view they clearly do, provided that companies design remote arrangements deliberately rather than by default1.
The strongest argument in favour is the recovery of commuting time. In major cities, employees routinely lose ten hours a week to travel — time that benefits nobody. When remote work returns those hours, the gains are not confined to leisure2: parents cover school runs without taking leave, and employees in expensive capitals can live further away, easing pressure on both their finances and the housing market. In other words, the advantage compounds well beyond the individual worker.
The disadvantages are real but narrower than they appear. Collaboration and mentoring undoubtedly suffer when colleagues never meet, and early-career staff lose the informal learning that comes from simply overhearing experienced people work. Yet these costs argue for hybrid schedules rather than for abandoning remote work3: gathering teams for two fixed days a week preserves precisely the activities that require presence, while keeping the flexibility that employees now demonstrably value when choosing employers.
Weighing the two sides, the benefits are broad, durable and shared across society, while the costs are specific and largely solvable4 through scheduling. The advantages of home working therefore outweigh its disadvantages, and the sensible question for most organisations is no longer whether to permit it, but how to structure it.
A qualified thesis. The writer takes a clear side and adds a condition, which sets up the whole essay's logic — this is the nuance Band 8 Task Response rewards.
One idea, fully developed: saved time → concrete examples → a wider economic consequence. Compare the Band 6 essay, which spends the same words on three undeveloped ideas.
The concession is answered. The writer grants the disadvantage its full weight, then shows it points to a different conclusion. This move — concede, then redirect — is the clearest single difference between Band 6 and Band 8 argumentation.
The conclusion does the actual weighing the question asks for — it names the criteria (breadth, durability, solvability) instead of just repeating "advantages outweigh disadvantages".
Both essays answer the question and are organised into four paragraphs — structure is not what separates them. The Band 8 essay develops one idea per paragraph until it has consequences, answers its own concession, and weighs the two sides using explicit criteria. The Band 6 essay lists ideas it never develops and concedes problems it never answers. When revising your own writing, ask of every paragraph: did I extend this idea, or did I just add another one?